Joe Gray English 101
2/5/09 Rough Draft
Single sex schools are steadily declining in quantity especially in recent years. Parents are becoming less willing to pay extra or move into an area in order to send their child to a single sex institution. As more of the single sex schools close, more parents seem to be debating the issue of whether or not single sex schools are more productive than co-ed. While there are no solid statistics for either side of the argument there are some very good points to be made about the issue.
Some people believe that single sex education benefits children and should be available. Thomas Spielhofer from the National Foundation for Educational Research stated that single sex education leads to a more productive child as well as a raised interest in the subjects offered in school.
With the declining amount of single sex schools there are clearly many people against the concept. A good amount of parents of both boys and girls worry that if their children are not exposed to opposite genders at a young age they will not be able to successfully interact with them when they are grown. Another concern and disadvantage to single sex education is that the number of students is dwindling therefore the child’s social skills would not be as well developed in theory. Researcher Amy Saltzman said that boys especially would be at a disadvantage because of an overload of testosterone in their atmosphere with no sense of balance.
Some of the arguments have been addressed by both sides. Some would say if the children have trouble focusing because of another gender then it’s a maturity issue rather than a co-ed effecting intelligence issue. Also single sex schools have less students, which means more one on one time for each student resulting in better education, but if the two had the same quantity of children the education would likely be at a more similar level.
Overall there are compelling arguments for both sides. In the end it is the choice of the parents of where their children attend school. However the declining number of single sex schools is limiting the options of many families. The statistics still do not support either side because the class sizes and area of schooling is hard to even up.
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Joe Gray English 101
2/5/09 Rough Draft
-->[Title?]
-->[Works Cited list is not in proper format.]
Single sex
-->Single-sex [Correct this mistake throughout your essay.]
schools are steadily declining in quantity especially in recent years.
-->[Not idiomatic.] ...schools are disappearing, especially
-->[contradictory: if the decline is steady, it can't be especially great at any particular time.]
Parents are becoming less willing to pay extra or move into an area in order to send their child to a single sex
institution. As more of the single sex schools close, more parents seem to be debating the issue of whether or not
single sex schools are more productive than co-ed. While there are no solid statistics
-->[Regarding what?]
for either side of the argument there are some very good points to be made about the issue.
Some people believe that single sex education benefits children and should be available. Thomas Spielhofer from the
National Foundation for Educational Research stated that single sex education leads to a more productive child
-->[More productive =??]
as well as a raised interest in the subjects offered in school.
-->[Unparallel.]
With the declining amount
-->number
of single sex schools
-->schools,
there are clearly many people against the concept.
-->The fact that the number of single-sex schools is declining indicates that they are unpopular.
A good amount of
-->["Amount" is for non-countable nouns such as sugar and tea, not for people.]parents of both boys and girls worry
that if their children are not exposed to opposite genders at a young age they will not be able to successfully
interact with them when they are grown.
-->with them as adults.
Another concern and disadvantage to
-->Another problem with
single sex education is that the number of students is dwindling
-->dwingling;
therefore the child’s social skills would not be as well developed in theory.
-->[Garbled, non-sequitur.]
Researcher Amy Saltzman said
-->claims
that boys especially would
-->boys, especially, would
be at a disadvantage because of an overload of testosterone in their atmosphere with no sense of balance.
-->[Testosterone is not in the atmosphere.] because of the testosterone overload.
Some of the arguments have been addressed by both sides.
-->[Not clear. Rephrase.]
Some
-->[Some...some: echo. Vague. Rephrase.]
would say if
-->that if
the children have trouble focusing because of another gender
-->because of the presence of both sexes,
then it’s a maturity issue
-->the issue is maturity.
rather than a co-ed effecting intelligence issue.
-->[Garble. Non-sequitur.]
Also
-->[Don't start sentences with "Also"]
single sex schools have less
-->fewer
students, which means more
-->means there is more
one on one
-->one-on-one time
for each student resulting
-->student, resulting
in better education, but
-->education; [delete "but"]
if the two had the same quantity of children the education would likely be at a more similar level.
-->if single-sex and mixed schools had the same student-to-teacher ratios, they would have similar results.
Overall there are compelling arguments for
-->on
both sides. In the end it is the choice of the parents of where their
-->In the end, the parents must decide how they want theirchildren attend school.
-->children to be educated.
However the declining number of single sex schools is limiting the options of many families. The statistics still do
not support either side because the class sizes and area of schooling is hard to even up.
-->[This sentence should go earlier. However, it contradicts what you say about "compelling arguments."] The data is
not persuasive because it is impossible to mitigate the importance of variables such as class size and school
location.
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=JmxvZ2lucGFnZT1Mb2dpbi5hc3Amc2l0ZT1laG9zdC1saXZl#db=aph&AN=9607027642
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